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Some people love meeting others online. Others feel that friends on the internet are not as real or as close as when people know each other in person. Can online friends be as important as face-to-face friendships? Discuss your ideas and support them with reasons and examples.

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Nowadays, there are many ways to call or see your
friends
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 like using digital
apps
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 or meeting them in real
face
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 to
face
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. In my opinion, it is better to know
friends
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face
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 to
face
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 in the real world , in
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 essay I will discuss both views. On one side of the argument, there are
people
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 who argue that the benefits of meeting
friends
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 online considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
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 is that communication digital
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 are faster to communicate and it's save time as you can meet a friend from another country in just a
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, there are some new
apps
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 that support video calls so you can see your friend as well. It is
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 possible to say that online
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 are vital for business these days as many managers now use online meetings with their staff,
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, during COVID-19 approximately most meetings worldwide are done through different digital
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. One good illustration of
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 is digital
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 make it easy for us and for company owners to communicate with others.
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, it is
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 possible to make an opposing case. It is often argued that in fact meeting
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 online is not affected like seeing them
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 to
face
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.
People
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 often have
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 opinion because they can't express their feelings through digital
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,
people
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 nowadays just use emojis and smiley faces to express their feelings, will leads to boring in relationships,
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 you cannot know if the other side says the truth or not,
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, during covid most students were sleeping during online classes as result we still try to deal with our student educational level nowadays. In conclusion, both views have it is advantages and disadvantages.On balance,
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, I tend to believe that meeting
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face
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 to
face
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 is better than seeing them throw digital
apps
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.

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grammar
Improve the grammatical correctness and variety. Some sentences have grammatical errors that make the meaning unclear.
support
Provide more relevant and detailed examples to support your argument. Current examples could be more specific and varied.
coherence
Enhance the transitions between paragraphs to improve the flow of ideas. Use linking words and phrases more effectively.
clear argument
The ideas are clear and you have provided arguments for both sides of the topic, showing a balanced approach.
structure
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task response
You have addressed the prompt effectively, covering different views on the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Geographical locations
  • Cultural backgrounds
  • Emotional support
  • Sense of community
  • Niche interests
  • Emotional depth
  • Trust
  • Anonymity
  • Non-verbal cues
  • Body language
  • Facial expressions
  • Misunderstandings
  • Time zone differences
  • Physical presence
  • Loneliness
  • Detachment
  • Blended friendships
  • Social media
  • Online forums
  • Digital interaction
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