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Thanks or acceptance You recently spent the week on holiday at your friend’s new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Say what you like about his new house •Say what you enjoyed most about your holiday •Suggest when and where you could meet next Informal

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Dear Neil, I’m writing to say a big
thank-you
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thank you
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 for having me over
last
 week, I had a really great time !
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 was really great to see you and your new house What I really loved about the trip was We should meet again soon. I suggest we find a time in How about a weekend next month ? I’m looking forward to seeing you soon Thanks again, Viki
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task achievement
Try to develop each idea further to provide a more complete response. For example, elaborate on what you liked about the house and what you enjoyed most about the holiday.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single clear idea with supporting details. This will enhance the readability and coherence of your letter.
task achievement
The informal tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, making it feel personal and warm.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are suitable and add a friendly touch to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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