The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map

given

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gives

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two potential locations for the shopping mall

centre

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in the

city

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. As we can see the

city

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has two locations

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s1 and s2. The s1

location

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is near to housing

estate

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, in the middle of

river

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the river

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and

road

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. The second

location

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is under all places. The s1 is located in

central

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the central

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mall

that

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which

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can be advantageous for people

while

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the s2 is on the ground floor

that

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can be disadvantageous.

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the

map

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the railway is to cross two locations , so the transport can not drive

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the

road

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. The

first

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possible

location

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for the planned housing

estate

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where almost live half the population is so close to

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first

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the first

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location

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This

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the

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apply

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ideal for the people that live in

this

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location

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for shopping but the people of

industrial

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the industrial

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estate

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would be far away from

this

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centre

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. The second

location

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which is

the

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apply

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under the all buildings having three

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road

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roads

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and

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railway

that

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apply

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wouldn’t be profitable for

industral

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industrial

estate

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. But the

road

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and the railway can

be help

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get to

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first

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the first

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location

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and central

centre

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. The

better

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best

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place to

communication

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with

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city

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the city

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and live

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would be the

first

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location

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s1 that be located with

park

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a park

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city

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centre

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, half the population and all the

river

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rivers

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and

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road

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roads

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, city, location, estate, road, first with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

214 words

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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people think that men and women have different qualities , therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extant do you agree or disagree

In many countries, childhood obesity is a growing problem. What are the reasons for this and what can individuals and governments do to tackle the problem?

The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the envirnonment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement

In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.