The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of

Brandfield.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make

comparisons where relevant.
The map
given
Wrong verb form
gives
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two potential locations for the shopping mall
centre
in the
city
. As we can see the
city
has two locations
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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s1 and s2. The s1
location
is near to housing
estate
, in the middle of
river
Correct article usage
the river
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and
road
. The second
location
is under all places. The s1 is located in
central
Correct article usage
the central
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mall
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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can be advantageous for people
while
the s2 is on the ground floor
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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can be disadvantageous.
According to
the
map
Add a comma
map,
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the railway is to cross two locations , so the transport can not drive
in
Change preposition
on
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the
road
. The
first
possible
location
for the planned housing
estate
where almost live half the population is so close to
first
Change the article
the first
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location
.
This
is
the
Change the article
apply
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ideal for the people that live in
this
location
for shopping but the people of
industrial
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the industrial
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estate
would be far away from
this
centre
. The second
location
which is
the
Correct article usage
apply
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under the all buildings having three
road
Change to a plural noun
roads
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and
Correct article usage
a
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railway
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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wouldn’t be profitable for
industral
Correct your spelling
industrial
estate
. But the
road
and the railway can
be help
Change the verb form
help
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get to
first
Add an article
the first
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location
and central
centre
. The
better
Correct word choice
best
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place to
communication
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communicate
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with
city
Add an article
the city
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and live
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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would be the
first
location
s1 that be located with
park
Correct article usage
a park
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,
city
centre
, half the population and all the
river
Fix the agreement mistake
rivers
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and
road
Fix the agreement mistake
roads
show examples
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, city, location, estate, road, first with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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