The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The map

given

Wrong verb form

gives

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two potential locations for the shopping mall

centre

in the

city

. As we can see the

city

has two locations

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apply

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s1 and s2. The s1

location

is near to housing

estate

, in the middle of

river

Correct article usage

the river

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and

road

. The second

location

is under all places. The s1 is located in

central

Correct article usage

the central

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mall

that

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which

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can be advantageous for people

while

the s2 is on the ground floor

that

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which

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can be disadvantageous.

According to

the

map

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map,

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the railway is to cross two locations , so the transport can not drive

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the

road

. The

first

possible

location

for the planned housing

estate

where almost live half the population is so close to

first

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the first

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location

This

the

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apply

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ideal for the people that live in

this

location

for shopping but the people of

industrial

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the industrial

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estate

would be far away from

this

centre

. The second

location

which is

the

Correct article usage

apply

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under the all buildings having three

road

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roads

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and

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railway

that

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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wouldn’t be profitable for

industral

Correct your spelling

industrial

estate

. But the

road

and the railway can

be help

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help

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get to

first

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the first

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location

and central

centre

. The

better

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best

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place to

communication

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communicate

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with

city

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the city

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and live

Unnecessary verb

apply

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would be the

first

location

s1 that be located with

park

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a park

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city

centre

, half the population and all the

river

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rivers

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and

road

Fix the agreement mistake

roads

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, city, location, estate, road, first with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

214 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

shopping mall
city center
suburbs
accessibility
public transportation
congestion
local businesses
economic impact
environmental considerations
infrastructure
urban planning
development
consumer behavior
green spaces
residential area

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