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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the majority of
population
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 retain their own electronic devices,
hence
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 it is convenient to work
at
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 its
accomodation
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accommodation
. Many people argue that working in the house is
inefficent
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inefficient
, but I claim that the benefits of working at home outweigh the drawbacks.
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,
workers
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 can manage their
time
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 effectively
while
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 staying in the house, meaning that they can organise the
scedule
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schedule
effectivey
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effectively
effective
.
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,
workers
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 in some companies waste their
time
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 by sitting on
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 chair
while
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 looking at the empty screen. By arranging their
time
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 by themselves, they can set the working
time
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 when they can focus well.
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,
workers
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 will be more motivated to work, leading to
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 job satisfaction.
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, the business stands out compared to other competitors, becoming the company with the best working
condition
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.
In contrast
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,
workers
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 may exploit these advantages for themselves to maximise their free
time
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.
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, they could utilise
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 free
time
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 by meeting their
collegues
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colleagues
 or playing video games
while
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thier
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their
 managers work in the office.
This
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 would result that
few
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a few
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workers
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 may not be able to finish their jobs on
time
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.
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, the
overall
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 working process becomes unproductive, yielding
to be
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less
competitive
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 in the market.
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Consequently
, the business might step out of the sector
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 a high inefficiency caused by an ineffective strategy. In conclusion, the approach of working in their home
maxmises
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maximises
maximise
 their abilities as long as the secure system
set
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 by managers.
In
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overall
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, the pros of
persuing
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pursuing
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 jobs out of the
working place
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workplace
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outranks
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 the cons.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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