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As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#internet #newspapers
These days
people
 are not buying
newspapers
 as they would
do
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in the earlier days
due to
 the
internet
's success. I fully agree with
this
 statement. You can notice that everyone is slowly forgetting
newspapers
 because they are getting all the needed information
in
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a
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the
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 touch of a button and at a much faster pace. After the rapid evolution in the
internet
's accessibility,
people
 are more connected than ever. Everyone is sending and receiving data as they consume and as it occurs.
For example
, all the press companies
are having
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 their own news channels which can be watched
in
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on
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 Television and Online.
Also
, these entities have their own mobile applications as well. So, the entire population is receiving live updates from all around the globe.
Therefore
, the need for
newspaper
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 is redundant. Earlier
people
 bought daily papers for many reasons and not only for news consumption. They used to check papers for job announcements, rental advertisements, and for the special columns etc. Especially, many
people
 spent a lot of time on the crosswords, puzzles, and
the
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sudoku sections. Nowadays, specific online websites, TV channels, and mobile applications are available for each of these purposes.
For example
, dubizzle for rentals,
naukri
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 for jobs, and many more online games websites. So, the need
of
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newspapers
have
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 been gradually reduced
due to
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the internet
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internet
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.
Although
 the newspaper's demand has been reduced, few
people
 would like to buy and read papers on a daily basis. It has become their habit and they are used to the touch and feel of the
newspapers
. My view is that
newspapers
 are not needed because of the
internet
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 success, but we should
also
 not forget about the printing industry that depends on the printing of
newspapers
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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