living in a country where you have to speak a foreign languagecan cause serious social problems, as well practical problems

it is said that when
people
live in a
countrythat
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country that
must speak another language, they may face some serious social
problems
like practical
problems
.
i
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strongly
belive
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believe
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that the language of the country
which
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in which
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people
live
is
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in is
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one of the important
thing
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things
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that they should learn before going there because of
alot
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a lot
of reasons like socialising and communicating with other
people
. first of
all
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when
people
want to live in another country except their motherland, most of the time they would not have all of their family and friends around
themselves
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so they need to find new friends.
for
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instance when they decide to go to the
retaurants
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restaurants
restaurant
and hang out with other
people
or meet
some one
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someone
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, they need to know most of their speech or their joke.
Although
they can talk with
bodulanguage
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body language
bad language
, it is very hard to enjoy
for
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both
side
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sides
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of the speech.
secondly
, there are
alot
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a lot
of
problems
which
people
all the time face them.
for example
imagine a person who is sick and
need
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needs
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to go to the hospital, how she/he
can
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talk to the doctor and explain the
problems
or
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if
people
did not know how to talk in
a
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language where live, how they would
to
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go to the bank and open the bank account or how could they shop. in conclusion, when
people
can not speak fluently with others they can not make fun of something, they can not
socilise
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socialise
socialize
with others so
they
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apply
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after a
while
they stay at home and do not try to go out and meet other
people
.
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