The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of  Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and charts illustrate the total amount of the police budget and where the money was spent compared between 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain.
Overall
, it can be seen that the total budget in 2017 was higher than in 2018,
additionally
, the police station distributed major of
money
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the money
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in salaries followed by accommodations transport, and technology, respectively.
According to
where the money came from, the highest income was from
National
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the National
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government with 175.5 million in 2017, the second place was local taxes accounting for 91.2 million and the other sources
was
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were
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around 38 million, interestingly, the police income in 2018
following
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followed
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the same pattern.
Furthermore
, the proportion of expenditure in 2017 and 2018 had the same trend, in which salaries for officers and staff were the greatest among the others
while
technology was the least.
However
, salaries
was
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decreased from 75% to 69%,
while
technology was increased from 8% to 14% in 2018.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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