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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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The line graph depicts the
consumption
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 patterns of four different types of meat and
fish
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 in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, the
consumption
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 of chicken increased steadily throughout the
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 period, ultimately becoming the most popular meat by 2004.
In contrast
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, the
consumption
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 of
beef
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,
lamb
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 and
fish
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 all declined, with
fish
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 consistently remaining the least consumed item. In 1979,
beef
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 was the most consumed meat, with
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 average of 220
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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. Chicken, though less popular, was consumed at a rate of approximately 145
grams
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, which was slightly lower than
lamb
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 at that time.
However
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, chicken
consumption
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 experienced a continuous and significant rise, surpassing both
beef
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 and
lamb
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 in 1989 and reaching 250
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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 in 2004.
On the other hand
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,
beef
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consumption
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initially
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 experienced a slight increase in the early 1980s, peaking at around 240
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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, but
subsequently
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 saw a sharp decline, falling to approximately 100
grams
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 by the end of the period.
Similarly
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,
lamb
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consumption
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 decreased steadily from around 150
grams
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 to just 60
grams
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 per
person
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 per
week
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.
Fish
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, which started at a modest 60
grams
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, exhibited a gradual decline to about 50
grams
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 by 2004.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, beef, lamb, grams, person, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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