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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can indeed pose both social and practical challenges. Do you agree or disagree?

#country #language #challenges
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Residing in a country where you have to speak a foreign
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 may be both challenging in terms of social and practical
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. I agree
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 the statement regarding the difficulties a non-native person encounters when living
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 a country where the
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 being used is not their first
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. Generally,
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 is used as a way of communication
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it
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be verbal or nonverbal, the problem arises as
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people
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 may
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, given it is not their mother tongue.
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problems
such
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 as interpretation and understanding are commonly encountered when talking to other
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. For
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instance
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 the word "flat" in American
english
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 may be different in British
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. The word "flat" may mean apartment in British
people
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while
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 American citizens may understand it as exact or level.
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result
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people
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 with two different origins may have a misunderstanding on the subject
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matter.
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in terms of
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 there are
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opportunities
 that may be lost because of
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 barriers. Take an example, English medical health professionals may not easily express their scientific management in Mandarin or German even if it
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life and death situation because it may result
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 inaccuracy or misinterpretation. Another example in terms of practicality, entrepreneurs may find it hard to sell their product if they do not know how to speak the foreign market they want to enter.
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 may result in less amount of sales and
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 of effort.
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, foreign
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language
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languages
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 may impose challenges for non-native speakers as
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 may entail societal and practical quests.
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task achievement
Your essay successfully addresses the task by discussing both social and practical challenges of living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language. To improve your task response, consider providing more specific examples and expanding on your ideas to create a more comprehensive argument.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is well-organized, the logical flow can be improved. Try to use clearer paragraph transitions and more cohesive devices within paragraphs to provide a smoother reading experience.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that you expand on your points more thoroughly. Adding more details and explanations will help strengthen your main arguments.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion and clearly states your agreement with the statement.
introduction conclusion present
Your conclusion succinctly summarizes the key points of your essay, reinforcing the main argument.
relevant specific examples
You provide relevant examples that help illustrate some of the challenges faced when living in a country where a foreign language is spoken.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Language barrier
  • Cultural integration
  • Communication skills
  • Miscommunication
  • Social exclusion
  • Language acquisition
  • Language proficiency
  • Workplace challenges
  • Adaptability
  • Cultural diversity
  • Multilingualism
  • Bilingual education
  • Expatriate
  • Language immersion
  • Cross-cultural understanding
  • Integration programs
  • Cultural sensitivity
  • Language fluency
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