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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situationsuch as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #situationsuch #job #shortage #money #situations
In today’s society, bad situations come
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 to accept a critical situation, like
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 job and money
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 point of view is better to attempt and enhance these situations. It is important to understand both sides of
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 to gain some knowledge. In
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 I will discuss both views and support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, accepting a bad situation
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people
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 stress. To illustrate
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 acceptance can lead to less frustration and stress.
Moreover
, it is important to take care of mental health.
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, one leading university in China has researched
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the
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working
people
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 mental health,
nearly
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 50% of
people
 complained about their bad
experience
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 in cooperate
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 and they how
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ignore
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 it.
On the other hand
, trying to improve the situation will
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to
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personal growth. To briefly, actively working for their future
it
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improve
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 their capacity and they can gain more knowledge about it.
Furthermore
, getting job
opportunies
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opportunities
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that the essay has a clear and concise introduction that introduces the topic and outlines the structure of the essay. This will help in better framing the discussion.
introduction conclusion present
End with a strong conclusion summarizing the main points and clearly stating your own opinion. This will provide closure to your argument.
supported main points
Develop each point with more detailed and varied examples, and make the links between your points and examples clearer.
logical structure
Use transition words and phrases effectively to make the essay flow more logically from one point to the next. This will improve the overall coherence and cohesion of the essay.
logical structure
Avoid repetition of ideas and structure. Instead, introduce new concepts and arguments to provide depth to the discussion.
introduction conclusion present
You have introduced both perspectives in the introduction, which sets up a clear framework for the discussion.
relevant specific examples
You provided an example from research in China, which adds some evidence to your point about accepting bad situations.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unsatisfactory situation
  • stress
  • mental health
  • content outlook
  • humble outlook
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • empowerment
  • control over one's destiny
  • proactive problem-solving
  • innovative solutions
  • creative thinking
  • resilience
  • stronger character
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