Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments.

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Nowadays, some people think that doing
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an experiment
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experiment
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experiments
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on
animals
is not allowed and we should stay away
from
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, but other people believe that significant
scientfic researchs
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scientific research
can be done
by
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animal experiments, personally, I prefer to stay away from hurting
animals
and the whole
enviroments
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environment
environments
in general and try hard to find any alternative. On the one hand, doing experiments on any kind of animal could have
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dangerious
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impact on the
enviroment
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environment
in the future, because all species depend on each other in
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of food, and that's why if we kill any certain species; we are causing a shortage in food for
other animal
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another animal
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,
for example
, a recent study found that
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when companies use a certain animal for
discovories
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discoveries
by
time
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other species are dying
due to
haveing
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nothing to eat.
On the other hand
, some companies use
animals
to
discovore
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improve
the
safaty
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safety
of the product before
humen
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humans
consume it, and they think it will not affect the
enviroment
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environment
,
and
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they do their
researchs
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research
on the most
commen
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common
animals
on
this
planet like
monkey
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and
mouse
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mice
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,
for instance
, most of the popular and expensive (skincare, shower-gel and
shamppo
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shampoo
) brands like Dove and Nivea, try their product on
animals
for more
safaty
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safety
before sending it to the stores.
To sum up
,
till
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this
day many companies do scientific
experments
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experiments
on
animal
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animals
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for
safaty
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safety
, but there is a huge amount of people that don't agree with that and trying to
avoide
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avoid
doing it because they don't want to cause damage
for
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the
enviroment
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environment
, I believe we should stop doing researshs on
animals
and try to find an alternative.
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