The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the sequence of produced
sugar
from sugar
cans.
As an initial overview, we can see that, the process completed
via seven steps only.
A more detailed look at the diagram reveals that the procedure began with planting the Add a missing verb
is completed
sugar
canes, and that, sugar
canes require 12 to 18 months to grow up. Thereby you should cut the sugar
cane, whereas
this
step of harvesting proceeds with special equipment or, traditional method by hand. Then
, the cutting sugar
canes are crushed and converted to juice
by a crushing device. Subsequently
, start to refine the juice
with a limestone filter. After purifying the juice
, that
transforms into syrup cross the evaporator step, by boiling the Correct pronoun usage
which
sugar
juice
in a special can.Consequently
, the centrifuge separates sugar
crystals from syrup, so that
, Correct determiner usage
apply
Wrong verb form
dispose
disposed
the syrup Add the preposition
disposed of
thus
, you need just the crystal sugar
for the next step.Finally
, drying
the crystal Verb problem
apply
sugar
and cooling
Wrong verb form
cooled
it
to become suitable for utilizingCorrect pronoun usage
apply
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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