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The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The given picture provides information about how ketchup from tomatoes is manufactured.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that production comprises fifteen processes.
However
, they are divided into three main stages: picking up, creation and delivery. In the first stage, all tomatoes are collected, before being divided into quality. Afterwards, it is sent to the factory where workers get rid of pedicels, seeds and skin.
Following
this
, pure tomatoes are transferred to a pot before being crushed. Over the course of the next step, after sugar, vinegar and salt are added to the container, everything boils, and
then
 it cools off in 2 hours. Once liquid is poured into a dish, it is labelled, next ketchup goes through quality control. The operation ends when employees package products and supply them to supermarkets, from where anyone can buy the ketchup and consume it with fast food.
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task achievement
Your essay provides a complete response to the task by summarizing the process of making ketchup, but some steps could be explained more clearly. Consider providing a bit more detail on steps like the quality separation of tomatoes and the boiling process.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, try to use more varied and precise linking words to guide readers through the stages. For example, instead of 'afterwards', use 'subsequently' or 'next'. Also, there is some awkward phrasing that could be refined for better readability.
task achievement
Your introduction is well-structured and provides a good overview of the process, which sets clear expectations for the reader.
coherence cohesion
You effectively employ transitional phrases like 'following this' and 'over the course of the next step' to move from one stage to the next, facilitating a logical flow.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harvesting
  • ripe
  • sorting
  • washing
  • crushing
  • paste
  • cooking
  • ingredients
  • sugar
  • vinegar
  • spices
  • flavor
  • bottling
  • sterilized
  • labeling
  • distribution
  • packing
  • transport
  • retailers
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