The internet has transformed the way we live, but it has alos created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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In the modern era, the

internet

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has become

the

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integral part of

human's

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human

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life,

however

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along with

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technological advancement, numerous severe issues are origin by the

internet

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will stop

this

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as a discuss about

the

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apply

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problems and

solution

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solutions

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off the

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. When it comes to the problems

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that emerged

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emerged

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from the

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, the first and foremost most

commonly

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issues

comes

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into

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light

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online scams and frauds. Since people have started using digital

transaction

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transactions

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and online banking through

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internet

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the internet

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, they off only

targeted

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the

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scammers. They always seek innocent individuals from whom they can still information, which is called fishing.

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, people especially

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the Young

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Generation

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are

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using the

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immensely these days for online classes, online games and

for

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apply

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social media.

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addictive

behavior

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is not wise for their physical

as well as

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mental health.

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according to

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the

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doctors

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76% population of children have weaker eyesight in the world

due to

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the excessive use of the

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. If they continue to do so they will have to undergo

eye-surgeries

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. When it comes to the solutions

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the given problem, the first and the most effective one, I believe is

the

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that

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strong security measures needs to be implemented by online websites on their online services. So that they can easily

detected

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be detected

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and

logged

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sensitive data in case of stealing

install

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secondly

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, social awareness could be the possible course of action through the government can reduce the usage of the

internet

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among the Younger demographics.

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can be done by

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them with

severe

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the severe

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repercussions and negative impacts of the

internet

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, in 2017, as

online

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shopping website Amazon realized that their customers

are

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triggered by online scammers, they started using

one

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time

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password method to secure the safety of their customers and the data has been

showed

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that

this

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matter successfully dropped online scamming by 73%. In conclusion, the

internet

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Boon

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for our modern society, which has a lot of positive impacts,

however

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it's

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its

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negative sides cannot be ignored. After considering the

internet

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's role in the modern world, I believe,

individual

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individuals

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have to learn how to use the

internet

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wisely.

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coherence cohesion

You should improve the logical flow of ideas in your essay. At times, the transitions between ideas feel abrupt and lack seamless connection. Try using more cohesive devices and linking words to join sentences and paragraphs together smoothly.

coherence cohesion

There are areas with grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For instance, 'the internet has become the integral part of human's life' should be 'the internet has become an integral part of human life'. Focus on refining these sentences for clarity, and consider proofreading for grammatical issues.

task achievement

You have provided relevant examples, but ensure they are clearly linked to the problem or solution being discussed. For example, your mention of children and weaker eyesight due to internet use could be expanded on by linking directly to the specific problems it causes.

task achievement

You have successfully identified two major problems associated with the internet – online scams and excessive use by young people. This shows good understanding of current issues.

coherence cohesion

Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main points discussed in the essay and offers a perspective on the responsible use of the internet.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

353 words

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