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The two maps below show an island before, and after the construction of some tourist facilities, summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The two maps below show an island before, and after the construction of some tourist facilities, summarized the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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Both maps
illustrates
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 an
island
 before and after the development of tourism facilities. The
island
 is long and thin, surrounded by the ocean. Over the period,
island
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the island
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 transformed dramatically but did not
developed
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eastern
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the eastern
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 side of
island
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the island
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 yet. The large addition to
island
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the island
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were
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was
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 many numbers of accommodation houses for tourists, mainly set up around a reception that
placed
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was placed
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 in the centre. To
north
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the north
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 of the
reception
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reception,
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 a restaurant was constructed.
In
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west
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the west
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 side of
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the island
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island
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island,
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 beach was prepared to
swimming
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swim
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.
In contrast
, before the development of tourist objects,
island
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the island
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 did not have any facilities. A pier
also
 was
main
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a main
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 point in the development of reconstruction for tourism. Pier is constructed in
south
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the south
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 part of
island
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the island
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 and
also
have
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has
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vehicle
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a vehicle
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 track for transporting people to the reception and the restaurant.
Consequently
, accommodation houses have
footpath
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footpaths
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 to walk around
in
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on
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 the
island
. Trees
in
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on
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 the
island
was
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were
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 not
chopped-down
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chopped down
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 and just
stays
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stayed
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 in the footpath near accommodation houses.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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