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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates a comparison of the average number of car
jounrneys
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journeys
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into
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 the city centre made by
riesident
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resident
residents
 and non-residents over a decade from 1996 to 2005.The data are measured in numbers.
Overall
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, journeys
car
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by car
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 were more popular
between
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among
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 residents before parking meters
introduced
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 into
city
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the city
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 centre. The data for all people who lived in the city centre was relatively low after Westgate Sreet and Park Lane closed to traffic. On the one hand , during the first four
years
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 the average daily car journeys
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ranged between 10,000 and 9,000.
In contrast
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 , the data significantly fell to exactly 5,000 in 2002.
Additionally
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 , it continued to decline to around 4,000 and 3,500 in 2003 and 2004, respectively.
Moreover
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 ,the total number increased a
littel
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little
 in the
last
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 year , reaching roughly 5,000. In 1996 , the initial number
for
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 non-residents was 5,000.
This
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 figure experienced an upward trend to just over 8,000 in 1999.
However
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, it slightly declined and remained approximately stable between 2000 and 2002 at around 8,000 , before
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 a sharp decrease and reaching a low point of 3,000 in 2003.
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