The bar chart below shows the number of people who visited different museums in London during different months in 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
This
bar chart illustrates the number of people
that have visited different numbers of museums in London during various months.
To begin
, most of the visitors visited the museum
in August, with the majority, in this
case approximately 700,000 of them attending the British
Museum
. In addition
, from the graph, the British
Museum
is considered to be the most attended museum
in London across all five months.
On the other hand
, there is a dramatic difference between the British
and National Museum
.
From the chart, there is a small portion of people
visiting the National Museum
, with a total across all five months that doesn't exceed 1,200,000 people
.
Moreover
, the second most favourable month to go to museums is the month of September, with the majority of people
visiting the Science and British
Museum
.
To conclude
, it is widely obvious that museums are very popular as millions of people
visit them throughout the year.Submitted by Rneem on
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