The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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line graph shows the proportions of the population in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia living in urban areas from 1970 to
present
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the present
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and predictions for the future
Overall
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,
although
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,
it is clear that
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there are some significant gaps in the number of people who live in cities,
these
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apply
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all four countries show
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an
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upward trend. Focusing first on two countries that
have
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had
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higher
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a higher
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percentage in 1970, in Malaysia, the figure of people in the cities dramatically increased in
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the 1990’s
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1990’s
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1990s
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and excessed that in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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during
this
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period.
Exmaning
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Examining
the projections
next,
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the gap between these two countries will be 20 % in 2040
while
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this
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difference in 1970 was almost 3 %
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Indonesia experienced considerable growth in
number
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a number
the number
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of people in the cities from past to present,
increased
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increasing
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about 5 times compared to
the
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apply
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1970.
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, Thailand saw a stable figure from 1990 to 2020.
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,
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similarly
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similarly,
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in Indonesia, it will see a dramatic increase in the future.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, ".
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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