The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This

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line graph shows the proportions of the population in

Philippines

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the Philippines

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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia living in urban areas from 1970 to

present

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the present

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and predictions for the future

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although

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it is clear that

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there are some significant gaps in the number of people who live in cities,

these

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apply

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all four countries show

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upward trend. Focusing first on two countries that

have

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had

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higher

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a higher

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percentage in 1970, in Malaysia, the figure of people in the cities dramatically increased in

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the 1990’s

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1990’s

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1990s

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and excessed that in

Philippines

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the Philippines

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during

this

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period.

Exmaning

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Examining

the projections

next,

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the gap between these two countries will be 20 % in 2040

while

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this

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difference in 1970 was almost 3 %

Next,

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Indonesia experienced considerable growth in

number

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a number

the number

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of people in the cities from past to present,

increased

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increasing

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about 5 times compared to

the

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apply

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1970.

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, Thailand saw a stable figure from 1990 to 2020.

Nevertheless

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similarly

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similarly,

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in Indonesia, it will see a dramatic increase in the future.

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Aug 7, 2024

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

161 words

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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Many governments think that economic progress is the most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people believe that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crimes, others believe that it is not morally, correct to kill criminals discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Nowadays the way people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?