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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to takle the issue?

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Modernisation changes so many things. Humans developed so many things for their own good but
this
 development has harmed the
environment
.
This
 essay will discuss how
industries
 and new transportation methods contribute to
pollution
 and what measures should be taken by authorities and individuals to resolve
this
 issue. One of the main reasons which is responsible for global warming is new factories which are increasing day by day. These factories use certain chemicals for processing certain materials and when these chemicals are exposed to the
environment
 via fumes and water harm our
environment
.
For example
, most of the metal warehouses use sulfuric acid to remove corrosion and during
this
 process, many gases are produced which increases the
pollution
 level.
Moreover
, some
industries
 are responsible for deforestation as well because firms produce furniture on a large scale to fulfil their needs they cut a large portion of the forest. Which results in increased temperature in that particular area. The fumes from Vehicles are
also
 one of the main reasons which increase the pollutants in the
environment
. To resolve these issues the government should need to take actions like a ban on the
industries
 and motors which produce
pollution
. Electric vehicles and environmentally friendly
industries
 should be introduced by the authorities. And it is the duty of all folks if they see any source which produces
pollution
 should be reported immediately. In conclusion, one can say that things which are harming our
environment
 need to be banned or appropriate action should be taken against all the factors which harm the
environment
 and contribute to global warming and we have to protect our nature.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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