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Band 1.5

The process below shows how leather products are made.

The given picture illustrates the
process
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which
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  animal skin is  produced. From a closer inspection of the
picture
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picture,
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 it is readily apparent that
,
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apply
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 the
process
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 by which leather
has
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 made can be outlined in 11 steps,  starting from drying the leather to
finished
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the finished
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 product. First of all, when animal skin has dried it is delivered to the factory with transports. After it is washed, it has been soaked in lime.
The next step is
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  it
has
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 flattened by special machines,
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then
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and then
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 it  
has
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 soaked with tannin before 
polishing
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the polishing
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process
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. The following
process
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 is that
,
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 it has delivered with vehicles to other factories. The
last
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 step is that in
factory
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a factory
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 it
converted
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is converted
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 into a finished product.

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task achievement
The essay describes the basic steps in the process, but some steps are missing or not fully explained. Ensure every step is mentioned and explained clearly.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into distinct paragraphs, such as an introduction, a body describing the process, and a conclusion. This structure will make your essay clearer and more cohesive.
task achievement
Expand on each step a bit more. Providing extra details will help the reader understand the process better, and it will demonstrate your ability to provide a thorough response.
coherence cohesion
There are some grammatical inaccuracies and awkward phrasing that affect the readability of your essay. Review your essay for these issues and correct them.
introduction conclusion present
End your essay with a conclusion that briefly summarizes the process. This will help tie your essay together and give it a sense of completeness.
task achievement
You have provided an overview of the process and broken it down into steps, which is a good approach.
coherence cohesion
Your essay attempts to describe the visual information in a logical sequence, which helps in understanding the process flow.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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