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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates some facts about Bristol University pupils in three different years. The data are measured in percentages.
Overall
, the number of new
students
 experienced an upward trend . Meanwhile,
male's
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male
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 rates were proportionally high, compared to females. The data
of
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on
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 international
students
 increased significantly
at
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in
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 the
last
 year. In 1928, the proportion of new
students
 enrolled was 218, more than half of
student
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students
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 were boys,
while
 just 42% were girls .
Additionally
, the girl's rate declined to 32% in 1958 which was the total
individual
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number of individual
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 new learners was 1,046.
However
, in 2008 both gender rates were approximately equal.
On the other hand
, the rate of
students
 who
come's
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come
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 from within 30 miles was fifty
perecent
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per cent
 in 1928, the figure shows a sharp fall to almost
quarter
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a quarter
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 in 1958, and continued to go down, reaching a low point at 1-2 parts per hundred
at
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in
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 2008. Regarding
students
 from abroad, they
was
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were
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 less than 10%
btween
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between
 1928 and 1958.
In contrast
, they rose rapidly
at the end
ot
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of
 the period and
reach
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reached
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 around 30%.
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