The graph below show gives information about the percentage of population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictaion for 2030 and 2040
The graph provides information about the
percentage
of Use synonyms
population
in Use synonyms
Philippines
, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia, countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with Correct article usage
the Philippines
prediction
for 2030 to 2040.
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predictions
Overall
, Malaysia Linking Words
was
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apply
clearlly
the highest Correct your spelling
clearly
popuation
from 2000 to 2040 years than the other countries. In 1990 Correct your spelling
population
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percentage
of the Correct article usage
the percentage
population
, shows changed suddenly in all four countries.
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Malaysia
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Malaysia's
population
living in Use synonyms
city
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the city
start
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started
30
% in 1970 and upward to 80% in 2040. Change preposition
at 30
In addition
, from 2030 to 2040 was Linking Words
rasie
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raise
anly
about 5%.
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only
In
1970 to 1980 the Change preposition
From
percentage
of the Use synonyms
pepole
living in Correct your spelling
people
Philippines
was the same rate. Correct article usage
the Philippines
However
, in Linking Words
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last
of 1980 suddenly Correct article usage
the last
highest
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the highest
about
50%.
From 1990 to 2020 Add a missing verb
was about
was
the same rate Unnecessary verb
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percentage
of people living in Thailand. Use synonyms
Also
,Hitting the highest point around 50% of Linking Words
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population
in 2040.
Indonesia Add an article
the population
was have
the lowest Change the verb form
had
population
in 1970,but from 1970 to 1980 was gently Use synonyms
increase
. Wrong verb form
increased
Furthermore
, the Linking Words
population
in Use synonyms
indonesia
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Indonesia
start
to grow until became the second highest Wrong verb form
started
population
of other all three cities.Use synonyms
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