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You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter

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Good afternoon, dear sir. As you know, we
are
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have had
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 your tenants for at least 2
last
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apply
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years. We are an intelligent family with adult children, without pets. When we prescribed our contract, you promised me to make some necessary
repair
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repairs
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 and
exchange
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exchanges
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 of the furniture. But after two years we are still struggling with those problems. First and foremost,
dining
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the dining
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 room table.
It's seems
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It seems
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elder
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older than
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then
 my grandfather, I'm sorry to tell it. We had not even one normal dinner, the table
is
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was
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 wobbling.
Secondly
, the dishwasher. It works every other time. And it spoils clothes. I have discarded spoiled clothes all the time. Please, I desperately beg
you
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your
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 help,
otherwise
 we'll have to move from
this
 house. Sincerely
your
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yours
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, Anastassia.
Submitted by anastasia on

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coherence cohesion
Enhance logical structure by organizing your complaints more systematically. Start with an introductory paragraph, followed by separate paragraphs for each concern, and conclude with a clear call to action.
task achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter. Consider rephrasing sentences like 'It seems elder than my grandfather' to 'It appears quite aged and unstable.'
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite, creating a respectful tone.
task achievement
Each issue is addressed specifically and clearly, adding to the completeness of the response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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