The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the numer of new shops that opened in one coutry between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below illustrates the number of stores that shut down and the number of new establishments that launched in a particular country between 2011 and 2018

Overall

, it can be seen that the trends were closures and openings which fluctuated in the amount. Looking at the line in detail, opening started at amount 85.000 in 2011, it turned down greatly to 4.000 in 2012. After that, it escalated to peak up the point at 6.000 in 2014.

Next,

it decreased to 4.000 in 2015. And

then

, it remained stable between 2016 to 2017. After that, the count dropped until the end period at 3.000 in 2018. Regarding the data on closures, it started at about 62.000 in 2011. And

then

, it refused slowly at 6.000 in 2012. After that, it increased dramatically to 7.000 in 2013. And

then

, it reduced gradually to approximately 61 in 2014.

Next,

it dropped greatly to about 500 in 2015. Once it raised greatly at 51,000 in 2016. And

then

, it stayed steady until the end period in 2018.

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