The map show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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report derives from the maps which enumerate the development of Southside, a shopping mall between the present and the future. A glance at the illustrations clearly reveals that the Linking Words
overall
trends of the reformation process encountered sophistication and expansion, with an elimination of the golf course which was located on the east side of the district. Linking Words
Furthermore
, by augmenting the space of the shopping mall, the facility became more spacious. Linking Words
In addition
, the mall will get two entrances after the renovation.
To be specific, in comparison to the present, the zone of the department store in the planned development possesses more larger section on the east side. Linking Words
Also
, the former narrow car park will be converted into a huge car park, removing the fitness centre which is located on the south side of the district at present. Linking Words
Moreover
, the play zone will be replaced by the beauty salon, and the cafe below the play zone will Linking Words
also
be supplanted by the information centre.
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However
, regarding that there are many variations during the reconstruction period, the future planned design still includes the supermarket with the same location in the region.Linking Words
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