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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
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pie charts showcase various mediums by which
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Canadian
people
of age
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aged
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 18 to 25 years used to watch television in the
year
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years
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 2009 and 2019.
Overall
, in the
year
 2009, Conventional
TV
 was the most popular and
Tablet
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Tablets
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was
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were
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least
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 used device
whereas
after
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 a decade, many
people
 loved
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TV
 and only
few
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a few
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 watched Conventional
TV
. To commence, in the
year
 2009, Conventional
TV
 was used by
highest
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the highest
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 percentage of
people
which
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34
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% and
tablet
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tablets
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 was used by the lowest proportion of
people
 and
was
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were
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 lesser by almost 7
times
. As compared to the
tablet
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tablets
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, laptops and mobile phones were greater by 4
times
 and 3
times
 respectively
as well as
 Desktop
computer
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computers
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was
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were
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 greater by nearly 3
times
 and Flat-screen
TV
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TVs
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was
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were
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 larger by 3%. In the
year
 2019, the usage of Conventional
TV
 declined significantly by 30% and only
few
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a few
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people
 preferred to watch it. On
contrary
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, Flat-screen
TV
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TVs
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 skyrocketed by about 3
times
 and became the most famous media and made 27%.
Similarly
,
tablet
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tablets
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 and mobile phones approximately tripled and doubled and reached 19%
and
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a number lower
to
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than
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 that of Flat-screen
Tv
 respectively.
However
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 it dropped in
case
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the case
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 of
laptop
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laptops
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 and desktop
computer
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computers
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 and had
similar
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a similar
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 proportion of 12% each.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, year, tv, tablet, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • 18 to 25 age group
  • devices
  • watch television
  • Canada
  • comparison
  • shift
  • preferences
  • mobile devices
  • traditional televisions
  • technological advancements
  • television viewing habits
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