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The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.
#percentage #persons #five #years #bar #arrest
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of individuals arrested in 5 years until 1994,
while
 the bar chart displays the most recent causes
for
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 arrest. On the one hand, 32% of
males
 got arrested in 1994 whilst 68% of
males
 did not get arrested.
On the other hand
, 9% of
females
 were arrested in 1994
while
 91% of
females
 were not arrested.
Moreover
,
the
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public drinking was the leading reason which is recorded as 31% of
males
 and 37% of
females
. The second major reason for
males
 was
the
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drink
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drunk
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 driving
that
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which
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 reached 26% of
males
, showing 14% of
females
 as well.
Nevertheless
, cases of
the
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theft were 16% of
males
 and 12% of
females
 which shows
the
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a
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 similar trend as the breach of
order
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the order
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. The bar chart for the assault showed 16% of
males
 and 19% which exhibits a higher percentage of
woman
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women
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 rather than
man
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men
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.
Lastly
, less
10
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than 10
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% of each group didn't reveal their reasons.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • arrests
  • bar chart
  • trends
  • age group
  • contrast
  • significance
  • factors
  • societal implications
  • crime
  • economic
  • social factors
  • legal factors
  • preventive measures
  • interventions
  • data analysis
  • demographics
  • reasons for arrest
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