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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts below illustrate the proportion of money invested in various categories (Higher
education
, Transportation, Environmental
services
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Services
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, K-12
Education
, Health and human resources, Other) by the government of Someland in 1980, 1990, and 2000.
Overall
, the highest percentage in each year is for the budget allocated to higher
education
.
While
 the
least
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lowest
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 percentage in the year 1980 is for environmental services, in 1990 and 2000 the smallest share is for the "Other" category.
It is clear that
education
 received most of the spending in each of these three years: 35% in 1980, 45% in 1990, and 40% in 2000. Following that, the K-12
education
 sector took 25% of the budget in 1980, which decreased to 20% in 1990 and to 18% in 2000. In the transportation field, 16%, 6%, and 22% of the total money
were
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 used in the years 1980, 1990, and 2000 respectively. When it comes to the health and human resources category, the allocation was 14% in 1980, rose to 20% in 1990, but
then
 declined to 10% in 2000. The environmental services sector had considerably small shares compared to other categories, with figures of 4%, 5%, and 9% respectively.
Finally
, the "Other" sector saw a gradual decrease throughout the years, starting at 6% in 1980, dropping to 4% in 1990, and reaching 1% in 2000.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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