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The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use.

The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use.
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The following bar chart represents the number of
visits
 to a community website between two different
length
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lengths
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: the first and second
year
 of use, over a one-
year
 period, starting from
september
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September
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 and ending with
august
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August
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 of an unidentified
year
.
Overall
, it can be clearly observed that the locals with
two-years
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two years
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 experience of an official site visit
more
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were more
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 frequent,
whereas
 that of those recent users was fewer throughout the given time frame.
However
, it is interesting to note that the figures in both
group
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groups
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 reached
its
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their
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preak
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peak
 around June to August. Starting with
a
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apply
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older users, at about 23,000
times
, was the highest number of
visits
 in June and July, followed by May at about 20,000
times
, and November and December at the same rate at 18,000
times
, respectively. It is noticeable that
in
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September, at approximately 250
times
, was the fewest
visits
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visit
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 for a second-
year
 group which
double
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was double
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 that of those first
year
.
Therefore
, at 15,000
times
, aigist accounted for the maximum
visits
 of
first
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first-year
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year
 users,
while
 in
february
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February
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 had the fewest figure with
the
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a
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 minimum of about less than 100
times
. In summary, the older
year
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the year
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 of use, the greater the number of
visits
 monthly in a
year
 except August
which
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when
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 the new visitors
overtaking
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overtake
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its
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their
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 older counterparts.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visits, year, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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