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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selectig and reporting the maain features and make the compariosn where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007,2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selectig and reporting the maain features and make the compariosn where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the total number of
households
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 in the United States by their yearly income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015 .
Overall
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 , The highest income was in the year 2015 for the
households
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 that
cost
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 more than 100.000$,
However
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, the lowest total was for the
households
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 that
cost
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 between 75.000$ and 99.999$ in 2007 and 2011 respectively .
Firstly
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 ,
Households
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 costing less than 25.000$ made an income of exactly 25
million
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dollars
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 in 2007 , afterwards , A gradual growth to around 30
million
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dollars
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 happened in 2011 and
then
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 , fell mildly in 2015.
Additionally
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 ,
Households
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 that
cost
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 between 25.000$ and 49.999$ figures fluctuated mildly from roughly 25
million
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dollars
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 in 2007 and
then
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 grew to 30
million
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dollars
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 in 2011 ,
then
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 dropped moderately in 2015 . For the
households
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 that
cost
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 25.000$ - 49.999$, the figures remained steady throughout the years and did not change .
Finally
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 , It is clearly seen that the
households
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cost
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 100.000$ or more showed the highest numbers . started in 2007 with roughly 30
million
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dollars
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 , after that, the number descended lightly and
subsequently
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 rose in 2015 to almost 35
million
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dollars
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 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, cost, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • household
  • income range
  • lower-income
  • middle-income
  • higher-income
  • trends
  • economic factors
  • policy changes
  • socioeconomic planning
  • features
  • comparison
  • increase/decrease
  • fluctuations
  • number of households
  • data analysis
  • observed changes
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