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The chart shows the information about salt intake in the US in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The chart shows the information about salt intake in the US in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The graph illustrates the consumption of
salt
 in the United States in 2000. As can be seen, the
salt
intake
 from
male
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males
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 were higher rather than
female
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females
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in
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of
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 all
difference
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ages
.
To begin
, males who were under 6
ages
 stood at 2000
milligrams
, those were
according to
 recommended child
salt
intake
. Following that, man people who were
adult
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such
 as 6-11
ages
, 12-19
ages
, and 20-39
ages
 consume
salt
 at 4000
milligrams
, 4500
milligrams
, and 4000
milligrams
, respectively. Meanwhile, the elderly
man
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aged
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 people
in
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40-60
ages
 at just around 4000
milligrams
 and 3500
milligrams
 saw a
consuming
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consumption
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 by
man
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men
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 who were over 60
ages
.
Subsequently
,
female
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females
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were
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under 6
ages
 and over 60
ages
 just
salt
intake
 at under recommended adult
salt
intake
,
at
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of
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 approximately 1000
milligrams
 and 2500
milligrams
, respectively.
On the other hand
,
female
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females
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 who have
age
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aged
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in
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apply
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6-11, 12-19, 20-39, and 40-60
ages
 in above
recommendation
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the recommended
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 adult
salt
intake
, with the same level
around
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of around
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 3000
milligrams
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salt, intake, ages, milligrams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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