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Many people believe there should be a curfew law so that people under the age of 18 are not out past midnight. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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 of 18 are not out past
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 believe there should be a
curfew
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law
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 so that
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 under the
age
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 of 18 are not out past
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. To what
extent
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 do you agree or disagree
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 Many
people
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 believe there should be a
curfew
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law
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 so that
people
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 under the
age
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 of 18 are not out past
midnight
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. To what
extent
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 do you agree or disagree
.
Change the punctuation
?
show examples
 Many
people
Use synonyms
 believe there should be a
curfew
Use synonyms
law
Use synonyms
 so that
people
Use synonyms
 under the
age
Use synonyms
 of 18 are not out past
midnight
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree
.
Change the punctuation
?
show examples

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly express your main idea in the introduction. Introduce your opinion about the curfew law early in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to help with the flow of your ideas. This will make it easier for the reader to understand the main points.
task achievement
Add specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention how curfews can lead to safer communities or how they may limit freedom.
task achievement
You have chosen a relevant topic that many people care about, which is a strong point for engaging readers.
coherence and cohesion
Your writing shows effort and you have tried to present different viewpoints.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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