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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart indicates the percentage of
divorce
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 in
Finland
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 and
Sweden
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 in five years respectively starting from 2011.it is clear from the bar chart that the two counties experienced different
increase
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increases
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 and
decrease
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decreases
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 in
divorce
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percentage
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percentages
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 over the years .
According to
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 what is shown
Sweden
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 reached
the
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its
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 peak in 2012
with
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on
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 nearly 50
in contrast
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, the lowest was in 2015
with
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at
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 nearly 40
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percent
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per cent
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 it is obvious that
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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divorce
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 rate is not steady
While
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Finland
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 was almost 40 in 2011 and decreased to almost 30 in 2012 and it was the
lowast
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lowest
while
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Sweden
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 was
in
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at
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 the peak,
Finland
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 experienced a jump in 2013 and
in
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apply
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2014 with almost 38
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percent
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per cent
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 and 41 respectively
while
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Finland
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 reached the peak in 2015 with almost 42
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percent
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per cent
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Sweden
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 was in 35
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percent
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per cent
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 which is the lowest
overall
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 we can say that the data indicates that the
divorce
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 rates in these two countries
has
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have
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 different rise and decline.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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