The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart indicates the percentage of
divorce
in
Finland
and
Sweden
in five years respectively starting from 2011.it is clear from the bar chart that the two counties experienced different
increase
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and
decrease
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in
divorce
percentage
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percentages
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over the years .
According to
what is shown
Sweden
reached
the
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peak in 2012
with
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nearly 50
in contrast
, the lowest was in 2015
with
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nearly 40
percent
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it is obvious that
Sweden
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Sweden's
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divorce
rate is not steady
While
Finland
was almost 40 in 2011 and decreased to almost 30 in 2012 and it was the
lowast
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lowest
while
Sweden
was
in
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the peak,
Finland
experienced a jump in 2013 and
in
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2014 with almost 38
percent
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and 41 respectively
while
Finland
reached the peak in 2015 with almost 42
percent
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Sweden
was in 35
percent
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which is the lowest
overall
we can say that the data indicates that the
divorce
rates in these two countries
has
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different rise and decline.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.

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  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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