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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
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The given flow chart shows information about
steps
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the steps
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 of the
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bricks
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brick
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 production process for building construction.
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, there are 7 main stages in
man-made
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the man-made
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 procedure, beginning with the extraction of clay by digger and ending with
final
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the final
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 delivery of the finished products. The first stage is when
excavator
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the excavator
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 starts to dig the clay. After that, clay is
plassed
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placed
passed
 on a metal grid, where it passes through and moves by rollers. At
this
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 point in the process, sand and water are added and mixed.
After
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this
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 step, there are two ways of
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bricks
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brick
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 formation with the usage of mould or
wore
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wire
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 cutter. In the subsequent stage, formed
bricks
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 are moved into
drying
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the drying
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 oven for
the
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a
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 period of
the
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apply
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24-48 hours. Once that stage has finished,
next
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the next
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 is able to start. The
bricks
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 are placed in a
moderate
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moderately
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 heated kiln for 200C - 980C,
then
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temperature
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the temperature
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is getting
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gets
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 higher for 870C - 1300C, after
bricks
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 should stay in
cooling
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the cooling
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 chamber for 48-72 hours. As
result
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a result
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, after several hours product is already done and
penultimate
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the penultimate
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 step is packaging the
bricks
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 to deliver them to the customers.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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