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Self- practice :27/11 The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Self- practice :27/11 The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the percentage of tourists who tended to visit three various regions in Europe over a twenty-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that visiting the lakes and the coast by travellers had a dramatic upward trend.
However
,going to
mountains
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the mountains
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 by
people
 had a modest upward trend over the period. In 1987,precisely 10,000
of
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visitors
prefered
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preferred
 to see the lakes in a European country(which was the least number of
visitors
 over the whole year).Afterwards,the percentage of
people
 who were into visit the lakes soared to nearly 75,000
people
 in 2002 and
then
at the end
 of the trend it reached 50,000
visitors
 in 2007.
Moreover
,the number of tourists who liked to see the coast in an area was 40,000 in 1987.Next,visiting the coast by
people
 hit
the
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 peak at roughly 76,000 in 2007.(Which was the
highiest
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highest
 number of travellers over the period).
In addition
,the percentage of
population
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the population
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 who chose to visit the mountains was 20,000 in 1987,and after a moderate increase,it reached approximately 35,000
visitors
 in a European country in 2007.
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