You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to the college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: • say why he / she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/ her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
Dear Alisa,
I hope you are well. I'm writing to tell you about
opinions
about Correct pronoun usage
my opinions
go
to Wrong verb form
going
the
Correct article usage
apply
college
or try
to get a job.
I guess, you would not enjoy Wrong verb form
trying
to go
to Change the verb form
going
the
Correct article usage
apply
college
because every day you have towake
up early and spend most of your time at Correct your spelling
to wake
college
. Instead
of spending all of your time at college
you can find a job and begin to earn your own money
. I think it will be good.
It's good if you get a job because you can use your money
freely , no one can be embarrassed you that " I once gave you money
"
I advised you to become entrepreneur
because Add an article
an entrepreneur
in
my opinion, you can double or triple the Add the comma(s)
, in
money
you put into your business. If you don't have a
Correct determiner usage
any
money
, I can lend you money
as a friend.
I hope my suggest
can help to you Replace the word
suggestion
for deciding
.
ShabnamWrong verb form
decide
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language
Ensure consistency in verb forms and sentence structures for better readability and clarity. For example, 'I'm writing to tell you about opinions' could be smoother with 'I'm writing to share my thoughts about whether you should go to college or get a job.'
task response
Expand on reasons why she might not enjoy college with more specific details to strengthen your argument. For example, you might mention her interests or personality traits that don't align with college life.
language
Avoid minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'towake' which should be 'to wake.' This will help in achieving a higher score.
task response
The letter contains a clear, direct response to the task, providing advice and personal opinions.
coherence
The paragraphing is generally effective, with each paragraph focusing on a distinct idea.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,