You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to the college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: • say why he / she would not enjoy going to college • explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/ her • suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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Dear Alisa, I hope you are well. I'm writing to tell you about
opinions
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my opinions
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about
go
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going
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to
the
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apply
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college
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or
try
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trying
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to get a job. I guess, you would not enjoy
to go
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going
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to
the
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apply
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college
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because every day you have
towake
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to wake
up early and spend most of your time at
college
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.
Instead
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of spending all of your time at
college
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you can find a job and begin to earn your own
money
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. I think it will be good. It's good if you get a job because you can use your
money
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freely , no one can be embarrassed you that " I once gave you
money
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" I advised you to become
entrepreneur
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an entrepreneur
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because
in
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, in
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my opinion, you can double or triple the
money
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you put into your business. If you don't have
a
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any
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money
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, I can lend you
money
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as a friend. I hope my
suggest
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suggestion
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can help to you
for deciding
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decide
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language
Ensure consistency in verb forms and sentence structures for better readability and clarity. For example, 'I'm writing to tell you about opinions' could be smoother with 'I'm writing to share my thoughts about whether you should go to college or get a job.'
task response
Expand on reasons why she might not enjoy college with more specific details to strengthen your argument. For example, you might mention her interests or personality traits that don't align with college life.
language
Avoid minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'towake' which should be 'to wake.' This will help in achieving a higher score.
task response
The letter contains a clear, direct response to the task, providing advice and personal opinions.
coherence
The paragraphing is generally effective, with each paragraph focusing on a distinct idea.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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