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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
divorce
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 rates in
Finland
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 and
Sweden
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 over a five-year period from 2011 to 2015. In 2011,
Sweden
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 had a higher
divorce
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rate
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at
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of
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 around 45%,
while
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Finland
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's
rate
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 was slightly lower at 35%.
Consequently
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, the following year,
Sweden
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's
rate
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 peaked at 50%, marking its highest point,
whereas
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Finland
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 saw a slight increase to just under 40%. In 2013, both countries experienced changes, with
Finland
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's
divorce
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rate
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 rising to match
Sweden
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's, both reaching approximately 40%.
As a result
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, from 2014 onwards, a decline in
Sweden
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's
divorce
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rate
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 was observed, dropping back to 45%,
while
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Finland
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 continued to see a steady increase, surpassing
Sweden
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 for the first time in 2015 with a
rate
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 of around 42%. Meanwhile,
Sweden
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's
rate
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 had decreased to just above 40% by 2015.
Overall
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,
Sweden
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 started with higher
divorce
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 rates, but by 2015,
Finland
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's rates had surpassed those of
Sweden
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, indicating a shift in trends over the observed period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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