The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the IK, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2002. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graph compared the number of telephone calls in
United
Kingdom from the years Correct article usage
the United
from
1995 – 2002 divided into three categories; fixed Change preposition
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line
local, fixed line
national and international, and mobile calls. It can clearly say
the local calls has a Wrong verb form
be said
gradually
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gradual
increase
from the beginning to 1999 and started a gradually
drop from 2000 to the end. Other calls type has a Change the adverb
gradual
continues
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continuous
increase
from the beginning to the end.
In 1995 the local fixed line
had more than 70B minutes
of telephone calls and the number increased gradually in
Change preposition
on
yearly
basis to be in 1999 around 90B Add an article
a yearly
minutes
in a year
. In 2000 the number had a steadily
drop to Change the word
steady
be
2002 around 71B Unnecessary verb
apply
minutes
by
Change preposition
per
a
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apply
year
. In
the other side Change preposition
On
the
mobile calls started in 1995 Correct article usage
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with
less than 5B Change preposition
at
minutes
by
Change preposition
per
a
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year
and had a
steadily Correct article usage
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increase
to stop in 1999 Wrong verb form
increased
around
12B Change preposition
at around
minutes
by
a Change preposition
per
year
. In 2000 the
mobile Correct article usage
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minutes
had a significant increase
to be
around 22B Unnecessary verb
apply
minutes
per a
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year
and it continued increase
to be at the of the graph Add the particle
to increase
around
45B Change preposition
at around
minutes
per a
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year
. The national and international fixed
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fixed-line
line
calls had a steadily
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steady
increase
from 1995 to 2002.
In conclusion, we can see that the mobile
phone Correct quantifier usage
number of mobile
minutes
has a
continued Correct article usage
apply
increase
throughout the period and it is clear that
people replace using the
fixed phone to Correct article usage
apply
a mobile phones
after 1999.Correct the article-noun agreement
mobile phones
a mobile phone
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