You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear John I hope
this
letter finds you well. I recently received your letter and understood that you are confused about whether to go to college or enter the
job
market. And I
had
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thought about it ,
therefore
I wanted to share my advice . I believe getting a
job
might be the best choice for you right now and I would explain why.
Firstly
, college is not for everyone and I know about you ,
therefore
it is not
enjoyable
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or beneficial place for you. College involves tasks that don't interest you and might feel like a waste of time for you.
However
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If you work somewhere you can earn money and improve your experience for another better
job
.
Secondly
starting a
job
could be useful for you and working right now improve your
skills
,
for
instance
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you can be well-rounded and you can pick up new
skills
very quickly . In the
future
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future,
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you will have
sense
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a sense
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of independence and financial security, as you can earn and save money . Choosing jobs in terms ,
if
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of
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you
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whether you
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like talking with people or you have
communicating
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skills
,
the
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apply
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customer service fits you , but if you like any technologic and if you have any technology
skills
you can be
IT
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an IT
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programmer ,
therefore
you could choose
job
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a job
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that is
suitable for you. Choosing
job
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a job
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does not mean closing doors on studying forever , if you want to study later you could do it . In
fact
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fact,
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there are jobs that need
degree
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a degree
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so you can study after improving your
job
skills
. I hope it helps you make
decision
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a decision
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and no matter what you choose, I will support you. I looking forward to catching up soon. Yours sincerely Asadbek
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coherence cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs with each one focusing on a single idea. This will improve the overall coherence and make your arguments easier to follow.
task achievement
Watch out for minor grammatical errors and consistency in tense usage. Proofreading can help you catch these issues.
task achievement
Your letter has a friendly and supportive tone, which is very suitable for the task.
task achievement
You included all the necessary components in your response: reasons for not enjoying college, benefits of getting a job, and job suggestions.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are well executed and add a personal touch to the letter.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Real-world experience
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • On-the-job training
  • Student loan debt
  • Personal growth
  • Professional networking
  • Career development
  • Skilled workers
  • Job market
  • Career goals
  • Immediate income
  • Professional relationships
  • Market demand
  • Defining interests
  • Educational investments
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