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Introduce yourself Ask the family some questions to get information that is important to you Tell the family about your arrivel date and time

#questions #information #arrivel #date #time
Dear
sir
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Sir
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/madam, I am Xasanov Diyorbek.I was born in Muborak
city
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City
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 in the middle of
desert
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the desert
a desert
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. As you know. I am going to visit
new
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New
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 Zealand for an "English and Homestay" . I am writing to ask for information about the family. The information I would like to obtain should include
following
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the following
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: Do you have
special
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a special
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 day
.
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?
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what do you do in your free time
.
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?
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 I am curious I like to go
famous
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to famous
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place
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places
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 by the way I love
foods
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food
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 and I want to go
famous
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to famous
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restarount
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restaurants
 in
new
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New
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 Zealand. I would like to
recieve
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receive
as
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it as
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 soon as possible but not later
then
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than
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 a week. My flight arrive in Willington on 18
august
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August
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 at 8:00 am.It would great help if you could fax me details I look forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully, Xasanov Diyorbek
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General
Improve the introduction and conclusion: While the introduction is present, it could be more engaging. Consider providing more context or background information before diving into your requests. Similarly, add a more formal closing remark before signing off, such as expressing gratitude for the family's time and assistance.
Grammar
Enhance sentence structure and grammar: Some sentences are fragmented or incomplete. For example, "Do you have special day.what do you do in your free time" can be corrected to "Do you have any special days or traditions? What do you like to do in your free time?" Reading your letter aloud can help identify areas that need improvement.
Task Achievement
Provide specific and relevant details: You can make your requests clearer by specifying why you need this information. For example, "I would like to know if you have any special days or traditions, as this will help me better understand and respect your family customs."
Grammar
Check for consistency and spelling errors: Ensure all spellings are correct, such as "restarount" to "restaurant" and "Willington" to "Wellington." Proper grammar and spelling ensure your letter appears professional.
Tone
Politeness and formal tone: The letter maintains a polite and formal tone, which is appropriate for the context of communicating with your host family.
Task Response
Clear intent: The main purpose of your letter is clear – to gather information about the host family and inform them about your arrival details.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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