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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart serves as an insightful illustration of
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
divorce
 cases in the two European countries
Finland
 and
Sweden
 from 2011 to 2015. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
,
Sweden
 had
higher
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a higher
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rate
 of
divoreces
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divorces
divorce
 when compared to its counterpart
Finland
 in all the years except 2015. Almost 50% of
sepration
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separation
 cases were filed in
Sweden
 in 2012.
While
,
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 the number of
divorce
 cases
were
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was
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 the lowest in
Finland
 during the same span. It is worth mentioning that the
overall
rate
 of
divorce
were
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was
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 escalating in
Finland
year
 by
year
.
Whereas
, the
rate
 was shrinking in
Sweden
.
Sweden
 had around
45
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a 45
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%
sepration
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separation
rate
 in 2011, which reached its peak in 2012,
almost
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and almost
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 every one in two
marraiges
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marriages
were
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was
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 falling apart. The
propotion
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proportion
 of
divorce
 dropped a little
year
 by
year
 ultimately dropping it to 38% in 2015. On
other
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the other
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 hand, an opposite trend was observed in
the
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apply
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Finland
 the
rate
 of
divorce
 was increasing
year
 by
year
. In 2011, around 38% of
marraiges
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marriages
 were falling apart which dropped substantially in 2012 to 32% approximately. But, the numbers started to rise
year
 after
year
 and reached
its
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their
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 peak in 2015 leading to more than 40% of failed
marraiges
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marriages
into
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apply
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filling
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filing
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 for
divorce
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland, sweden, rate, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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