Some people think the news has no connection to people's lives, so then it is a waste of time to read the news in the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is believed that
News
has become a crucial event in human lives, especially
last
decades.
However
, a small part of society considers the new has no bond with the human act and it is just wasting resources.
Consequently
, in
this
essay, I will talk about the merits and demerits of the topic. First and foremost, I lean towards agreeing that the
news
recently has no connection to human life for many reasons the most important one is becoming
as
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a trade. the companies reach profit by spreading
rumors
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and fake
news
just to attract
people
to watch
it
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or buy it.
Moreover
, Nowadays TV programs
have
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not beneficial ideas for users when they push them to spend a lot of time behind the screen and make them feel depressed and obese because of showing fake events and keeping the person lazy and away from exercise.
For example
, the majority of
people
who sit for a long time suffer from obesity.
On the other hand
, a Bulk of
people
have been affected by the hearing
news
and always follow it day to day.in fact, they believe the truths are behind the screens.
Nonetheless
,
this
percentage as the surveys confirmed usually depends on the spread of
news
to gain
the
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knowledge more than peers.
In addition
, knowing the actions around the world.
For instance
, magazines and TV programs show what happens in all events in the hemisphere.
To sum up
, knowledge is beneficial sometimes and detected
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experiments to
people
and
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them lessons learned. eventually, each
behavior
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has advantages and disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • informed decisions
  • social issues
  • positive changes
  • weather updates
  • financial news
  • governmental policies
  • democratic participation
  • current affairs
  • local events
  • global events
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