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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 ➢ You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 ➢ You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar graph serves as an insightful illustration of the distribution of people’s
age
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Iceland over the three-decade period starting from 1990 – 2020. The units are measured in percentage. The overarching impression gleaned from the chart is that the
population
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 of the pupils in
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age
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bracket
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 of 25- 54 grew substantially by 2020. On
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, the
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15-24 years of
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 plummeted significantly.
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 with, in 1990, people falling under the
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bracket
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 of 55- 64 and 65 and above were almost the same approximately 10%. Which remained unchanged in the following decade. And mass under the
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bracket
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 of 0-14 and 15-24, were close to 25% in 1990 and the decade after.
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, the size of
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population
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for
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pupil
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 ranging from 25-54
was increasing
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 steadily for
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 three decades and
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 skyrocketed in 2020 reaching almost 50% by 2020.
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 to that, in
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 2010, people in the
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 group of 65 and above and, 15-24 were around 13%.
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 the
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 under the
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 group of 15-24 dropped drastically in the following decade, the
population
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 size for citizens under 65 and above
bracket
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 remained the same.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, population, bracket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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