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The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter: Describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly Explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours Suggest what should be done about the problem

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Dear Sir/Mme I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about a problem
The
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 system used for rubbish/garbage collection in my local area. the system used is not working properly. I
describing
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 the details in my letter. In the
beginin
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beginning
, the camion who collect the rubbish
come
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comes
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 too late at night.
Then
, many cats come for food and make
much
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a lot of
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 noise. It is a big problem
to
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 me and my neighbours.
Besides
, the workers
not
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do not
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 collect perfectly the rubbish. Indeed, workers don't take garbage
such
electronic
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as electronic
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 products.
Consequently
, these
rubbich
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rubbish
 destroy the beautiful view in my town.
Finally
, I propose to you Sir/Mme to make some
modification
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 to
this
 system. Indeed, it is appropriate to change the time of the
collect
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 of
rubbich
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rubbish
 and make
this
 time at 21 PM.
Moreover
, make an obligation to every person to not make electronic
rubbich
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rubbish
 in the same place
with
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as
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 other
rubbich
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rubbish
 and take these
rubbich
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rubbish
 to another place reserved
to
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for
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 the type of garbage. I would be grateful if you Sir/Mme
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 importance to my letter and
proposes
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proposed
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solution
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 for
this
 situation Yours faithfully
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task achievement
Make sure to proofread your writing to correct any spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'In the beginin' to 'In the beginning,' 'camion' to 'truck,' and 'rubisch' to 'rubbish.'
task achievement
Try to provide more detailed solutions or examples to strengthen your points, especially regarding the specific ways to improve the rubbish collection system.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea, and consider providing smoother transitions between paragraphs to enhance the logical flow.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your letter is well-organized, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate, showing a good level of formality and respect.
task achievement
You have effectively described the core issues and provided suggestions for improvement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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