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The bar chart compares the total number of vehicles per one thousand people in China who owns a car in the years 1987 to 1999.

The bar chart compares the total number of vehicles per one thousand people in China who owns a car in the years 1987 to 1999.
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The bar chart illustrates information about the number of vehicles per one thousand in China during four years from 1987 to 1999.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the number upwards trends throughout the periods. The
last
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 period accomplished the highest rate
by contrast
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 the first period expended the lowest ratio. Turning to the first point, we can observe that vehicles number had a higher rate approximately 90% in 1991.
On the other hand
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,
vehicle
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 rate was
a
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double dropped to 45%.
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, From 1991 to 1995 the percentage of vehicles continued to see a steady increase by almost,100.
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, we can see that a sharp increase in the following two years was observed, a growth back to 420 rates

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • vehicle ownership
  • per 1000 people
  • economic growth
  • rising income
  • year-on-year increase
  • significant jumps
  • data points
  • urbanization
  • industrialization
  • infrastructural impact
  • environmental impact
  • plateau
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