The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
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chart
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illustrates the number of tourists travelling abroad over a 10-year period from the year 1985 to 1995. The line
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presents the percentage of Japan's travellers visiting Australia in the same period.
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, in general, the
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chart
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depicts an upward trend during
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period.
However
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, there are two significant fluctuations in the line
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, respectively 1988 - 1990 and 1993-1995.
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,
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the
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chart
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only accounted for 5
million
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tourists in 1885,
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number gradually increased to around 11
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until 1990.
Subsequently
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, it approximately declined to 10.5
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in 1991
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consistently rose, ultimately comprising 15
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in 1995. Looking at the line
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in detail, it showed a similar pattern to the
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chart
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, with the exception of the two fluctuations.
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, it merely made up 2 per cent, continuously increasing by 5% in 1989.
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, there was a major fluctuation between 1988 and 1990.
After
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this
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fluctuation, it climbed sustainably, roughly constituted 6.2% in 1994, and eventually decreased to 6% in 1995.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, chart, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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