The two pie charts show how different industries used electricity in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two pie charts show how different industries used electricity in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The illustrated pie chart depicts a comparison between the electricity being used in different listed as Coal, Gas, Petro, Nuclear and
others
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industries
in 1995 and 2005. Upon closer perspective, in 1995, Coal, Gas, Petro each industry
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accounted for a near equal share of energy consumption, with each sector contributing approximately 29%. The remaining portion of electricity usage was attributed towards the Nuclear and Other
industries
which together made up
remaining
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over 11%. Meanwhile, in 2005, a transitional shift
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observed with over 9.72% which shifted into the other
industries
, resulting in
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% increase in coal,
gas
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and gas
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.
However
, a significant boost is observed in nuclear and others with over 9% in total.
Overall
, A significant reduction was observed in petro electricity usage which went toward the remaining
industries
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words industries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • industries
  • electricity usage
  • 1995
  • 2005
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • service sector
  • manufacturing sector
  • residential sector
  • agricultural sector
  • main features
  • summarize
  • reporting
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