The two pie charts show how different industries used electricity in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The illustrated pie chart depicts a comparison between the electricity being used in different listed as Coal, Gas, Petro, Nuclear and
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
industries
in 1995 and 2005.
Upon closer perspective, in 1995, Coal, Gas, Petro each industry was
accounted for a near equal share of energy consumption, with each sector contributing approximately 29%. The remaining portion of electricity usage was attributed towards the Nuclear and Other Unnecessary verb
apply
industries
which together made up remaining
over 11%. Meanwhile, in 2005, a transitional shift Verb problem
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is
observed with over 9.72% which shifted into the other Wrong verb form
was
industries
, resulting in 1
% increase in coal, Correct article usage
a 1
gas
. Correct word choice
and gas
However
, a significant boost is observed in nuclear and others with over 9% in total.
Overall
, A significant reduction was observed in petro electricity usage which went toward the remaining industries
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