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A friend of yours has always admired your car. You have now decided to sell it. Write a letter to your friend to ask if he is interested in buying your car. In your letter, • explain why you are selling your car • describe the good points and any bad points about your car • suggest the friend visits you to see and drive your car

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Dear David, I have decided to sell my
car
 and I remember you being interested in it in the past. We are taking some time off to travel as a family, so we will be buying a caravan which requires a
car
 with a bigger towing capacity.I am wondering whether you are still looking to buy a
car
 and if mine would suit your needs. My
car
 is now seven years old and
therefore
 has a few drawbacks that you should be aware of. First of all, the radio is not adapted to modern standards.I know that you like to listen to electronic and bass music, so
this
 may not satisfy you.
Also
, the seats are visibly damaged in the back, as my kids have sat there most of the time, but
this
 is repairable.
Otherwise
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Otherwise,
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 though, the
car
 is in excellent condition and I am sure that,
besides
 the radio, you be pleased with its properties. It drives very well and will get you through the most stressful drive to work or an enjoyable holiday trip with success. Just call me or write back if you would like to know more. I hope to see you soon if you would like to inspect and test drive my
car
! Best wishes, Tom.
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coherence cohesion
To achieve a higher score in coherence and cohesion, you could improve the description of the car's condition by clearly separating the positive points from the negative ones, making it easier for the reader to grasp the differences.
task achievement
Adding some specific details about the car's make, model, and mileage can make your response more complete and convincing.
coherence cohesion
The letter has an excellent greeting and closing. It feels friendly and appropriately set for the context.
task achievement
The writing tone is very suitable for a letter to a friend, making the reader feel comfortable and engaged.
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