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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Sarah Nice to hear from you. I assume
this
 is the perfect time to start working on your college project which is about celebrating the new year , Since it is early December and everyone is preparing for the day all around the world. I would like to share a few points about France to get you some points As you may know, French people especially here in Paris, families educate their kids from a very early age so that they learn to stick to the rituals and make sure to keep the importance to the next generations. Not only historically, but it is
also
 counted as the brightest night of the year with all the specifically designed lighting decorations .
Moreover
, here people of all ages get prepared for the big day weeks in advance, it is mostly widespread to throw incredibly fancy parties or dine out with their loved ones. What I most love about my country in those early winter days is the high energy of every individual in the hierarchy of society .the little sweet struggling to buy new stuff and outfits and solely spreads the fresh energy of beginnings. Hope you do your best in your project. Narges
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coherence cohesion
Improve sentence structure for better clarity. Some sentences are slightly awkward or fragmented.
task achievement
Try to enrich the response with a bit more detail about the specific rituals or events that take place during the New Year celebrations.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a friendly and engaging tone, which is appropriate for the task.
greeting and closing
The closing is well-crafted, wishing the friend well on the project.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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