Many people think it is very important to protect the environment but they make no effort to do it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What actions should individuals take to protect the environment?
Some
people
say that it is crucial to save nature but there is no action from them. The primary cause of this
problem is that people
do not want to protect the environment and the most viable solution is to educate their young people
about this
issue.
To be honest, people
do not want to save nature. Many humans who say that the environment must be protected, truly do not want to do such
things. For example
, my classmate Arman in his homework wrote that we must save our planet, but actually few hours ago, he threw a bottle of Coca-Cola and a bag of chips on the street. This
results in, there will a lot of people
who do not care about the world and his safety.
A long-term solution to this
predicament is to educate young children
about the dangers of not caring and not protecting the environment. Children
in school could be taught about how to save and protect the world. They are also
likely to teach their parents about the things they learned at school and adults will also
be influenced by this
initiative. For example
, school children
in Australia were taught about the consequences of polluted areas, showing a very high level of decrease in throwing garbage.
In conclusion, many people
say that they must protect nature but they do not take any action for this
because they do not want to do this
and their children
must be taught that all of us are obliged it is the only answer.Submitted by Kawasaki on
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